Apr 01 2010
Microfinance & women
Write a paragraph of about 100 words on the following topic:
“What is the importance of microfinance for women?
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There are some advanteges of microfinance for women. They can find capital which require to set up some work with the help of microfinance. As a result they can become more self-confident.Their assets become more developed so they can play more stronger role and also they take on leadership roles in their communities. Besides according to the Women’s Empowerment Program in Nepal, they make decisions on business, send their daughters to school, negotiate their children’s marriages and also plan their family. Briefly they have the right to comment on their life.
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It is good that you are giving the example of Nepal, but the example should be more specific (like numbers or a case)
There is the importance of microfinance for women. Researches has shown that women who make use of finance servise have increased their status within their family and the society. these financal servises enhance women’s self-confidence therefore, women can make a decision then they have assets, including possession and they have a voice in their society. There are some facts of why microfinance is important for women. The Women’s Empowerment Program indicated that properties are bought and sold by 68 percent of their members, they can send their daughters to school and they can plan their family.
Do not use such expressions “There are some facts of why microfinance”. Just give the fact to support your point
“Researches” – if you are going to mention about reseachers you need to be more specific and tell us which research and/ or researher and give the source (in text citation).
The poorest people in world are women. Therefore the Microcredit Finance is very useful for them. Many studies asserted that, access to financial services has improved the status of women on family and on social community. As a result, women have become more assertive and confident. Moreover, women have started to own possessions and they have started to play stronger role in desicion making and take on leadership roles in their societies.
You need to support your point with specific examples (i.e in Nepal, …number of women who took microcredit managed to ….)
Microfinanze programmes support women to improve their economical conditions and quality of life. First of all according to Susy Cheston and Lisa Kuhn, who made researches about women in Nepal realized that in Nepal women who take small amount of credits have more power to make decisions in their life. Such as economical and family issues. Secondly microfinanze help women to be more confident.
You started very nicely, but you need to develop your second point
The importance of microfinance for women can be seen best with comparing the previous and present living conditions of them. According to microfinance programmes from different regions, the roles of women in the society and in their houses have been changing. Members of microfinance programmes can make decisions about having property and in other subjects about their family and children. The self confidence in women has increased and their status within the community developed. For instance according to results of Freedom from Hunger studies in Ghana clients play an active role in public jobs and they can opine about more subjects.
Researches have revealed that access to financial services has enhanced the position of women inside the family and the community, in the whole world. Women becoming more confident and more assured. Moreover, women have property, including land and housing; play a stronger role in management and have role in their communities. They can say their words to express themselves. Also there are some facts of why microcredit is important for women. For example The Women’s Empowerment Program indicated that properties are bought and sold by 68 percent of their members, they can send their daughters to school and they can plan their family.
But you need to give the source (in text citation). When you say researchers you need to be more specific give the name of the researchers & the source
Microfinance is using for make decisions instead of women; according to Susy Cheston and Lisa Kuhn’s studies. For instance the Women’s Empowerment Program in Nepal’s studies show 68 per cent of associates were having an idea on inventing issues, also for sending their daughters to school, appeal to childrens marriage and designing family strucutre. Also by using microfinance provides your self-confidence to increase and get your status to improve in community, according to Freedom from Hunger’s studies conclusion in Bolivia and Ghana
Your main point is not clear from your first sentence. Are you talking about microcredits’ importance on women?
Your focus in the paragraph is not clear as well
Microfinance economicly promote women’s position in social life.For this situation women become more confident and strengthen.Women can express their ideas if women have self confidence.In order to get self confidence women should be educated or should get on the job training.Likewise microfinance client has led to increased self confidence in women and improved positions within the society.Also microfinance programmes from different areas report that women customers’s decision making roles increasing.Women customers were making decisions on buying and selling asset,besides sending their children to school,planing their family and negotiating their children’s marriages.
You are not forming any link between women getting microcredit & gaining self-confidence. You need to mentionthe name of the microcredit programmes and give the source of it.
Microfinance is very useful for women .Freedom from Hunger studies in Bolivia and Ghana so researches indicate that it provides to women more self-confidence. Also self-confidence brings having a say in womens life. It provide to improve life condition such as health outcomes for women or better education.Additionally it gives them to a big chance to lead their life.For example they plan their family and their daughter can go to school.
Genereally good. But “very useful for women” is very general. Useful in what sense? (i.e. improve their status)
More specific examples could be given to support your main point (.g. according to study X, Y number of woman in … country…)
Financial services has increased the status of women. They have become more ambitious and self-confident. Furthermore, women own valuable things such as land and housing, play a stronger role in decision-making, and take on leadership roles in their societies. In other words, they have say in their communities. For example, according to Women’s Empowerment Program in Nepal found that their members make decision on buying and selling product, they want that their daughter take education. So, they are sending their daughters to school. Briefly, they are planning their family.
Don’t forget to give your source.
Don’t forget to do intext citation. You need to infrom the readers both inside and at the end of your document about the sources you have used.
Thanks
Meltem