Comments for Blogging with INT Section 3

Comment on Beijing Sands storms by zuhalozcan

zuhalozcan — Mon, 05 Apr 2010 14:01:46 +0000

Because of extensive sand storms, pedestrians wear masks and scarves.
As a result of expanding into agricultural areas, Chinese deserts are growing.
The country’s industrial development is rapidly increasing, therefore, Beijing desert storms happen frequently.

The country’s industrial development is rapidly increasing; therefore, Beijing desert storms happen frequently.

Thanks Zuhal

Comment on Microfinance & women by meltemb

meltemb — Fri, 02 Apr 2010 11:14:02 +0000

Don’t forget to do intext citation. You need to infrom the readers both inside and at the end of your document about the sources you have used.

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Meltem

Comment on What is microcredit? by harunas

harunas — Thu, 01 Apr 2010 22:54:04 +0000

Microcredit is a small quantity of money lend to customer by a bank or another institution. Microcredit often be without colleteral and it has two different types. One of them is Group lending. It means, if one person needs money, the group supply that needs. Then, when people fix their situation they repay the borrowed money. Therefore, group lending also called solidarity lending. But, the person who borrow the money should pledge for repayment with a collateral or guarantee a loan. Second is individual lending. In this lending, any collateral or guarantee does not necessary.

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You are comparing wrong things (two microcredittypes). You are not giving in what way microcredit is different from other credit types

Comment on Microfinance & women by harunas

harunas — Thu, 01 Apr 2010 22:10:28 +0000

Financial services has increased the status of women. They have become more ambitious and self-confident. Furthermore, women own valuable things such as land and housing, play a stronger role in decision-making, and take on leadership roles in their societies. In other words, they have say in their communities. For example, according to Women’s Empowerment Program in Nepal found that their members make decision on buying and selling product, they want that their daughter take education. So, they are sending their daughters to school. Briefly, they are planning their family.

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Don’t forget to give your source.

Comment on Microfinance & women by gkoroglu

gkoroglu — Thu, 01 Apr 2010 20:06:05 +0000

Microfinance is very useful for women .Freedom from Hunger studies in Bolivia and Ghana so researches indicate that it provides to women more self-confidence. Also self-confidence brings having a say in womens life. It provide to improve life condition such as health outcomes for women or better education.Additionally it gives them to a big chance to lead their life.For example they plan their family and their daughter can go to school.

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Genereally good. But “very useful for women” is very general. Useful in what sense? (i.e. improve their status)
More specific examples could be given to support your main point (.g. according to study X, Y number of woman in … country…)

Comment on What is microcredit? by nazlitiris

nazlitiris — Thu, 01 Apr 2010 19:38:24 +0000

Microcredits is a little number of money obligation to a customer by a bank or other institution.Microcredit can be offered to an individual or through group loaning.Individual lending contains that one customer and does not suppose other people to ensure collateral or guarantee a loan.In contrast,group lending includes solidarity lending and allows a number of individuals to support collateral or guarantee a debt through a group repayment promise.The encouragement to repay is based on peer compulsion.

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You are not giving in what way microcredit is different from other credit types.
Instead you are comparing two microcredit types, which I didn’t ask

Comment on Children & microfinance by zuhalozcan

zuhalozcan — Thu, 01 Apr 2010 18:54:32 +0000

The importance of microfinance for children is more related with children’s family. Microfinance influences children indirectly. When their family members become a client, the total income of the family increases so children can live in better conditions. The women’s role in family changes, they empowers. This reason also played a role in children’s living conditions. Their families can afford to send them to school and care about their health. Researches states that in the client’s area, the percentage of educated children raised. For example basic competency in writing, reading and arithmetic between children raised from 12 percent to 24 percent according to a Chowdhury and Bhuiya report.

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Well organized prg, but if you are saying researchers , you need to be more specific & don’t forget to give your source.

Comment on Microfinance & women by nazlitiris

nazlitiris — Thu, 01 Apr 2010 18:37:49 +0000

Microfinance economicly promote women’s position in social life.For this situation women become more confident and strengthen.Women can express their ideas if women have self confidence.In order to get self confidence women should be educated or should get on the job training.Likewise microfinance client has led to increased self confidence in women and improved positions within the society.Also microfinance programmes from different areas report that women customers’s decision making roles increasing.Women customers were making decisions on buying and selling asset,besides sending their children to school,planing their family and negotiating their children’s marriages.

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You are not forming any link between women getting microcredit & gaining self-confidence. You need to mentionthe name of the microcredit programmes and give the source of it.

Comment on Children & microfinance by nazlitiris

nazlitiris — Thu, 01 Apr 2010 18:14:07 +0000

Microfinance sympathize children’s training and boost health outcomes for children.Firstly,sympathize children’s training; essential competency in writing,reading and arithmetic among children 11-14 years old in BRAC associate households went up from 12 percent in 1992 to 24 percent in 1995,contrasted to only 14 percent for children in non-member households, in accordance with a Chowdhury and Bhuiya report.In addition to this in Hounduras protect the children clients raised earnings,which allowed them to send children to school and to under dropout.Secondly,improving health outcomes for children; clients discovered that less suffered from serious malnutrition contrast to a control group and most crucial,the emphasis of severe malnutrition went down as the length of time as clients raised.Futhermore,researchers conclude that access at the household level to credit acts as a substitue for child labor

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You need to paraphrase properly; otherwise, you will get a very low grade in the exam
ıf you are saying researchers you need to be specific & give your source

Comment on Microfinance & women by asgundogdu

asgundogdu — Thu, 01 Apr 2010 18:03:38 +0000

Microfinance is using for make decisions instead of women; according to Susy Cheston and Lisa Kuhn’s studies. For instance the Women’s Empowerment Program in Nepal’s studies show 68 per cent of associates were having an idea on inventing issues, also for sending their daughters to school, appeal to childrens marriage and designing family strucutre. Also by using microfinance provides your self-confidence to increase and get your status to improve in community, according to Freedom from Hunger’s studies conclusion in Bolivia and Ghana

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Your main point is not clear from your first sentence. Are you talking about microcredits’ importance on women?
Your focus in the paragraph is not clear as well